Today Jackson read us some writing that he had written at home. We gave him some feedback. These are some of the thing that we thought about his writing and his speaking:
* You used a clear voice and it was loud enough for us all to hear.
* You used expression for some of the words.
* You had time connectives.
* You had conjunctions to make your sentences more interesting.
* Your writing made sense.
* You had a closing sentence.
Miss Browne was very impressed with how Room 2 could give Jackson such sensible feedback. It shows that they all know what is needed in an awesome recount. Congratulations Jackson for writing a detailed and interesting recount about your trip to Hanmer Springs in your caravan, Cleo.
Jackson I really enjoyed reading about your writing success! Mrs Jansen
ReplyDeleteAwesome writing Jackson
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